Damn man, the only disadvantage to this one was that the flow wasn't there. your lines are a bit to long, try shortening them up man. but really your imagery/storyline was very compatable man, it kept me readin. your multiple use was good man, the first OM I've read from you when you actually used them and succeed with em great. So overall I'ma tell you this, dope shit man just keep writting like this but next time try and shorten your lines so the read would go faster.

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