Honestly I like the reason you wrote this.. but I wasn't really feeling the piece it self... it was an interesting topic though... I didn't feel that you really painted a vivid picture, or conveyed the guy's thoughts with any real clarity... emotionally I just didn't take that journey with you in this piece... however there is a dope quote in this...

"so I weaken myself and drown, no accident, for a purpose,
I'm going to hell anyways, why waste space on this surface"

That right there is hott...

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