this was an ok piece i guess, wasnt really feeling it, but it had ok imagery, also some lines didnt rhyme together

I'm drowning in my own ocean, pores open with salty sweats,
I'm fend to lose my breath, if I don't swim myself out of this.
My mind blurry like looking into a screene with full of "rice",
I'm swimming hard as I can, but my arms are weak

work on that

dis is sum fuked up shit that it was real, lol didnt the guy no when to stop???? wat a dumbass