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"My 2 Cents..."
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Yea...take each of those line, cut em in half where they rhyme...that's a bar, write like that...makes a piece much more easy to flow with, follow, and read period....
If this piece was more descriptive...like with tons of detail, and about 20 bars longer, this would be a great piece...I suggest you make titles for your spits, and make 'em longer...spend an hour on a verse if you have to, as long as the finishe dproduct is worthy of greatness...use mad detail, and descriptive vocabulary to bring life to your pieces...wordplay ios a must to, it betters the flow of the piece, and the construction of it too...
Holla.....
P.E.A.C.E.
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