i see u aint gettin no feedback so im here ta help you out

this piece was ok, i think you coulda focused more on the topic of w/o color if that was the main point you was trying to get at, but ya vocab was koo, tha flow was kinda easy to follow, but again i think you kinda jumped around with this 1, maybe you wasn't sure what you really wanted to say
but it was koo
*constructive crit*
keep uppin'