i write to give use to my mind, hopin' that i'll find
tha reason im expressed so truly thru these lines
that i take time, and think of ways 4 them 2 rhyme
and paint pictures to show to those gifted and blind.

it's kinda hard to read tha signs that are embedded wit pearls
so i often say "fucc tha world", hopin' it gives birth to a baby gurl
who will take her time wit her life, wastin' it perfectin' her curls
one day become a wife, and bring yet another soul to this world.

life's so focused on sterl-ing and material values....worthless
jesus died to cleanse our souls, tha result....we're still not perfect
instead we spend whole lives studyin' this earth, but still hurt it
it's said that tha greed to need money's a curse, but it's wat we work wit.

people get merked quik, cuz tha fact that words are mis-spoken
often they jokin', one takes it tha wrong way, a heart beat broken
words can be a strong weapon, but so often are bodies cast in tha ocean
death is tha token to heaven, but we arrive still searchin' 4 wat's golden.

so im hopin', that one day tears will no longer shed from a mother
and no longer will man have to infiltrate forbidden territory undercover
now i wonder, if it stabs ya mind to call sumone who looks different a brother
will we be able to come to peace wit eachother and view tha world without color?


This was like a 15 minute key....Blah....It's kinda old but I posted it to get active on here again....Peace

Damn man.....Niggs is sleepin' on me.....Blah.....Peace

Hmmm.....damn Yung this was a pretty nice drop.....Dope for sumthin' keyed up in like 10 minutes.....I do that same shit.....I always juss key up my shit on tha spot.....

This would be a hot reply if it wasn't from myself....Can I get sum replies.....Peace

i see u aint gettin no feedback so im here ta help you out

this piece was ok, i think you coulda focused more on the topic of w/o color if that was the main point you was trying to get at, but ya vocab was koo, tha flow was kinda easy to follow, but again i think you kinda jumped around with this 1, maybe you wasn't sure what you really wanted to say
but it was koo
*constructive crit*
keep uppin'