Some pretty cool lines in their dude, the gun ish was mad bullshit, dude ya fakin lol. But the flow is hot and theres a few witty lines there. Some creativity being shown on this. Not really a story this seems just like a quick write up and slap together thing so meh for the imagery on it. The vocab is weak but that didnt matter cuz this was a short piece with a short meaning. Anyway decent job dude, keep it up.
rtf here:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235871