Yea this will actually be recorded sometime soon. so word.

Paranoid - If The Streets Don't Kill Me

Paranoid - {Verse 1}
Imagine a world full of crooked cops and fiends
The type that don't fake. but the props they scheme
All the people around feelin dumb and afraid
I ask myself why are the streets no fun for may..
it's always been about hustlin n killin for change
Y'all might wonder why I'm against spillin the pain
Yo listen, I'ma never quit n flip my style
I love reppin love cause when I spit; I smile
Y'all know it's true, yo I seen you lookin at it
The way I slurr my words got ya hooked damnet
I can't follow wit a disease left in the streets
The killin spreads fast like a pest when it speaks
The love is lost, the rap game has been changed
Why is that? whats up wit the blame it's deranged?
The love of livin a fucked life is all deceased
Because of this huge war left out in the streets

Paranoid {Hook x2}
If the streets don't kill me.......
If the streets don't kill me........
If the streets don't kill me.......
I'm around wit belief that I'm bound to recieve

Paranoid - {Verse 2}
I've never even walked alone in my own hood
Knowin there's a lotta rude cats up to no good
I stay back and question my cities destruction
I ponder why was everyone's pitty sucked in
All the bad influence forced on the children born
Comin in rough, I've had enough of the thorn
All the shame and pain released from the earth
Spread among different ghetto's so I pun a worth
All the hated fame that fate claimed was for real
I couldn't understand the change so what's the deal?
Cause I hoped these people wouldn't kill the game
But now hope is fallin from all the spills they blame
I don't mean to dissapoint, I'm against the gangs
I just can't stand the hoods attack become a slang
The love of livin a fucked life is all deceased
Because of this huge war left out in the streets

Paranoid - {Hook x2}

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cool open mic lmao i havent read one fo these in like a year
kind of akward cause i was trying to flow it and shit
hook is ok i guess idk i dont liek it
verses are good most lines had mean only like 2 or 3 that seemed to be fillers

i jsut wrote a verse for a track abotu this typa shit holla at me of you wanna hop on it

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wow no love? rv is so gay in the open mic, all these wack ass open mics and no body peepin mine.

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do this go to the beat on soundclick
if the streets dont kill me?

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^yup.............

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wow this is wack....

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wackness, open mics are wack as fuck.

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yo fam dont get mad half the mutha fuckers on this site haten on the ones who actually doing shit wit they lyrics to tell ya the gods honest fam the flow was hot the hook was straight and all kinda short or my liking but it aint me spittin it ya feel me dont swet what these cats on rv r sayin man just elevate ya mind first then let ya lyrics follow... stay up killa keep doing ya thang

you sound like one huge bullshitter

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str8 shit here lyrics was cool........rymes were kinda simple but nice........structure was nice lol not use to text.......vocab was decent.......it flowed nicly for text
hook was simple as fuck but would proly be nice if this was audio.......
overall from wut i see decent piece if u turn this to audio ill hop on it for sure fam.........
sorry not more feed not a text reader.......
can u rtf on me vs zone out
honest votes will be returned..........

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Imagine a world full of crooked cops and fiends
The type that don't fake. but the props they scheme


yeah, thats pretty much every major city...and the type that don't fake?
what fiends and crooked cops fake, being fiends and crooked cops...shit doesn't make any sense whatso ever

atleast your flow is getting better

All the people around feelin dumb and afraid
I ask myself why are the streets no fun for may..

who is may? please don't tell me you were changing the pronounciaton of me...because that is fucking rediculous...

it's always been about hustlin n killin for change
Y'all might wonder why I'm against spillin the pain


alright, this shit is getting old...stop writin about stuff you've never seen before...
and no, nobody wonders why you're against "spilling the pain" you are spilling it...so nobody is going to assume you're against it...


you still suck dude, i will say this....your flow has gotten a lot better...your metaphors are starting to actually show some sign of coherent thought...

with that said...your shit is still fake, and still makes absolutely no sense 90% of the time

and you can wine about how i'm hatin on you...that's not it...i'm hatin on everyone who is too stupid to see that you are not dope...or anything close to it...and if you were to ever be dope, you need a ton of work...regardless of how much better you are than you used to be...seriously, get a dictionary....and study every thing you say...you will see the shit doesn't make sense..and you can try and argue with me if you want, but...i'm 20 years old, and a junior credit wise at the university of oregon..majoring in creative writing and journalism....we have a class called j02...i took it freshman year...Got a 94%....every morning we spend the first 15 minutes writing a one page paper...if we don't finish..we fail..if we make one grammatical error. we fail....if we use any word out of context, we fail. Those papers are worth 50% of our grade....anything you say, will be shot down...i can guarantee you that.

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Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate.

"watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox

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Yeah, this open mic forum does shit. Nobody here drops anything half decent. And nobody gives feedback. All I have to say is you better hope that you have a decent beat for that. Style reminded me of 50-cent or somethin. It flowed well throughout but there was no real good sign of actual writing or deep meaning... blah. I'd have to hear it on audio to judge..

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get attached to a rolling stone and you're libel to get crushed..

you'd have to understand my prospective on the lyrics...yall obviously dont get it so maybe its a track i'd scrap.

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prospective on the lyrics? go find a dictionary, like i said...and look up prospective...that word makes absolutely no sense in that sentence...as i said..you use words that you don't know the meaning of, and it's always wayyyyy out of context

maybe you meant perception....but it doesn't matter...it's not someones job to understand your shit when you don't come precise....a spelling error is cool, a few is cool...but a completely different word? no, not cool. and you do that virtually every bar

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Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate.

"watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox

The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew