"Have you ever found yourself
Setting all your dreams on a shelf
Waiting too long
For less than you wanted
All that shit
Others have flaunted" you man I thought you was going somewhere with this... I did like this part, but then it just began to fall apart... too short, simple vocab, simple rhymes, no wordplay... it's like you just gave up and said, fuck it...
You should have kept going with the idea of these first few lines... probably would of been hot...

Peace