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03-05-03, 04:08 AM
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I'll just go off the top of my head here.
IP: 8F25 FB35
Have you ever found yourself
Setting all your dreams on a shelf Waiting too long For less than you wanted All that shit Others have flaunted All my life been busy dodging hooks and throwin jabs only luck kept it from escalating to stabs don't get me confused with a fad i'm different i'm here to conquer not to play i'm here to stay and my morals never will they sway i have none look at me like i give a fuck my words hit you like a mack truck flat on the concrete you're stuck and if you walk out of here alive it's luck |
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03-05-03, 01:01 PM
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IP: 399E F0FD
"Have you ever found yourself
Setting all your dreams on a shelf Waiting too long For less than you wanted All that shit Others have flaunted" you man I thought you was going somewhere with this... I did like this part, but then it just began to fall apart... too short, simple vocab, simple rhymes, no wordplay... it's like you just gave up and said, fuck it... You should have kept going with the idea of these first few lines... probably would of been hot... Peace |
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03-05-03, 11:19 PM
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
yeah...i was tired and had worked all day...my mind was all fucking down....
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