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Old 11-18-06, 11:52 AM   #6
TeamOne
FuxJustAWord
 
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From: Chitown
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Intro: pretty decent intro..... and this beat is really fitting for this beat....

Verse 1: i really like how u enter the track lyrically.... and the flow is pretty nice... sounds kinda like nas "one mic" at one point "all i needa are a couple snareS" .... words are ur weapon, played concept.... but u put a decent spin on it... kinda raw how u do a "my music is everythin" and u build all those metaphors/similes... nice

Hook: I like the hook, but why dont u repeat it in the first hook..... u really shoulda done it twice....

Verse 2: ur emotion is pretty nice on this.... half way through u have a tone shift that really makes the song.... "have to" "want to" loved the emotion on that... this track is pretty good, and u both sounded good on the beat... i think lyrically implicit took this, but u brought a better flow and presence.....

I like how u did the hook again.... thats wat i want throughout the song.... ohhh and i really hate the intro.... sayin "test me nigga, im gangsta" really shifts the whole song away from wat implicit was talkin about.... should prolly take it out...

rtf http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=237260
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