just something i thought i key'd real quick i was inspierd by some shit i herd on t.v go figuer...

^^^^^^^^ thats says it all its a key style so no need for me to break it down cause for a "keystyle" its good to me.....but im gonna break it down and give u "real feedback" so u know where to improve......


delivery....could have been better if this was something u were concentrating on.....the "hook" at the beginning gotta go.....a little misspelling here and there.....

day by day activity give me life long lesson before puberty

^^^^^^^^^.......either i didn't read it right ...im not understand where "you" are coming from in your creativity with that line....or it just didn't make sense it was off and u worded it wrong.....

everyday another fight.. another gun... another knife
i know its trife fucking ya man wify... but this is everyday life

^^^^^^^^^^^ i would have said this bar like this.....

everyday its another fight another gun another knife.....
and i know its wrong fucking your wife but its everyday life.....

thats how i would have said those lines sounds better to me.....


need money to get cars... need family to feel home
but everyday u walk outside... there a new kid holding a chrome

^^^^^^ in this bar u could have been a little more descriptive when u were saying why u needed "money"......instead of just the basic "i need cars".....it would have made it more interesting to me.....i would of said it like this.....

need money to survive to help my family and keep a home.....

thats just me though........

cuz we stuck in this hell... even the presedent still going at war

^^^^^^ this line could have been broke down better....like this....

cause we stuck in this hell....and the president doesn't care....
...... "fuck the people" hes more concerned about going to war......

^^^^ thats just me though......

been fucking with so many hoes.. i think im use to leave'em fathered with they passifers

^^^^^^^^ this line seemed forced.....

ive been fucking many hoes leaving them fathered with they passifers....

^^^^^^ i think that sounds better......

overall like i said for a keystyle to me its good i give it a 7/10.....keep doing what u do fams keep writing.....~1~....

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