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08-09-07, 02:09 PM
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Banned: Biting
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same old bullshit..... REPP'IN 300 J.G...
IP: C0A8 2430
its the same old bullshit... reguardless of the day
its the same old bullshit... battling retarts everyday its the same old bullshit... trying to maintain its the same old bullshit... 300 J.G ya NIGGAS know the NAME... day by day activity give me life long lesson before puberty alot of hate'in emcees thinking they'll wreck ransum persuing me everyday another fight.. another gun... another knife i know its trife fucking ya man wify... but this is everyday life Its the same old bullshit just another day... got the same old job... trying to live another way need money to get cars... need family to feel home but everyday u walk outside... there a new kid holding a chrome this is the life we live when u resting in the projects cant even open ya door for fresh air... cuz there someone smoking weed on my steps another body in the morge when will this shit stop u call 911 for emergency... 2 hours later still no cops then u wounder why do we even have to pray to the lord cuz we stuck in this hell... even the presedent still going at war cant even be with 2 or more people while u buy at the store cuz to them every minortys is a nigger.. spic.. and more by now im surprise i aint kill myself to visit the after-life im full of battles... havin other punks slaghtered in my apitite... i might go hang myself tonight... but peep say thats-a-lier been fucking with so many hoes.. i think im use to leave'em fathered with they passifers this here need to stop... before i point the gun to my face and pull quick squeezd but no bang... forgot i never loaded the full clip... danm.. IM STILL LIVING WITH THE SAME OLD BULLSHIT.... 300 J.G POPP'IN OFF.. IM REPP'IN HARD BODY.... HOLLA AT ME....  just something i thought i key'd real quick i was inspierd by some shit i herd on t.v go figuer... |
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08-11-07, 11:47 AM
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IP: 9204 9119
just something i thought i key'd real quick i was inspierd by some shit i herd on t.v go figuer...
^^^^^^^^ thats says it all its a key style so no need for me to break it down cause for a "keystyle" its good to me.....but im gonna break it down and give u "real feedback" so u know where to improve...... delivery....could have been better if this was something u were concentrating on.....the "hook" at the beginning gotta go.....a little misspelling here and there..... day by day activity give me life long lesson before puberty ^^^^^^^^^.......either i didn't read it right ...im not understand where "you" are coming from in your creativity with that line....or it just didn't make sense it was off and u worded it wrong..... everyday another fight.. another gun... another knife i know its trife fucking ya man wify... but this is everyday life ^^^^^^^^^^^ i would have said this bar like this..... everyday its another fight another gun another knife..... and i know its wrong fucking your wife but its everyday life..... thats how i would have said those lines sounds better to me..... need money to get cars... need family to feel home but everyday u walk outside... there a new kid holding a chrome ^^^^^^ in this bar u could have been a little more descriptive when u were saying why u needed "money"......instead of just the basic "i need cars".....it would have made it more interesting to me.....i would of said it like this..... need money to survive to help my family and keep a home..... thats just me though........ cuz we stuck in this hell... even the presedent still going at war ^^^^^^ this line could have been broke down better....like this.... cause we stuck in this hell....and the president doesn't care.... ...... "fuck the people" hes more concerned about going to war...... ^^^^ thats just me though...... been fucking with so many hoes.. i think im use to leave'em fathered with they passifers ^^^^^^^^ this line seemed forced..... ive been fucking many hoes leaving them fathered with they passifers.... ^^^^^^ i think that sounds better...... overall like i said for a keystyle to me its good i give it a 7/10.....keep doing what u do fams keep writing.....~1~....
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