this is my first reply in this forum... but I liked it, even though people have said that it could have better vocab I think that the simplicity of the words worked well with it because it was more of you "tellin ya story" and when you're talkin to some one tellin them ya story you don't use big overbearing words... on a level it made it more real. The rhyming was nice, I've never heard the song and within the first few bars I could pick up a beat and follow it easily, like I said I don't know much about this forum and what's concidered "good" but I do listen to music and I could see myself enjoying something like this. I thought it was very well put together, flowed nicely and depicted the story well