^^ thats forced poetry brother ^^

that was written to look like the standard of poetry,

while ur intentions were good, the poem wasent

to write a poem, it doesnt come from the heart

none of that corny ass shit, it comes from ur hand

just write it man, dont mention any of these werds, EVER

death, love, sorrow, hate, color, homosexual, trapped
blaitent, mother, addiction, or theres 3 together, i love you

take the advice ur on ur way to writing good, readable poetry,

but very bad for your first try, no beef peace mayne