tight work, i wasnt feelin it at the begining(first couple lines) but then it started to pick up and then when i understood what u where gettin at i reread it and saw it was all on point. some deep ish man. and dont worry bout having a simple rhyme scheme. i mean i agree wit caspah somewhat, but complexity is not always the way to go. take a close look at some lyrics by famous rappers...most of them barely use 4 syllable words... so in my opinion if you tryin to get a major point across and hit hard wit it simplicity may be the way to go, because if its to complex you might get carried away with just rhyming and multies and lose sight of your original point, nah mean?

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