I've never been a fan of net-gangsta pieces without much behind them.
You had some good multis, and your flow was alright.
Plus, I liked your wordplay "actions speak louder then words, so I'm an action speaker"....or something like that.
That was the dopest part of this piece.
Try to elevat you vocab and break up your lines so that you can clearly see flow and shit like that.
Pretty good though, for a mainstream type of piece
Peace

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