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Old 06-28-03, 10:50 PM   #1
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Life on my Block (true story keystyle)

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all my life I been raised around Bloodz-n-Crips//
at age 8 I was sellin' drugs-by-bricks fuck an alarm clock I woke up to metal -slugz-with-clips//
fuck-in' chicks that have too great of a love-for- dick//
rollin' with thugs-n-kidz that won't hesitate to snuff-you-quick...

ever since a young age I been havin' elaborate schemez//
alwayz wanted to be havin'-thingz//
had lavish-dreamz of havin'-cream//
laughz-and-screamz overwhelmed me as I was gettin' jumped by Latin Kings//
I had-my-team went back and stabbed they backs as retaliation to those back-stabbin'- fiendz...

envision a little 10 year old with black-Adidas already packin'-heaterz//
I had the baddest-chicaz come to my crib and lemme twist em' a fatty with hash-and-reefer//
actions speak louder than wordz so I was alwayz an action-speaker//
I was tought that if you don't say nothin' then you can't say nothin' wrong to be catchin'-beef I guess my dad's a wack-ass-teacher...

I chilled with Crips on my block that's why da god is alwayz rockin'-blue//
alwayz been with obnoxious dudez so don't take it personal if my niggaz pop-ya-crew//

at the age of 17 I got kicked out the crib and moved into the Covenant-House//
got discharged for stealing and was homeless got jumped by 6 niggaz next day the main nigga got snuffed-in- the-mouth//
a day after that we was closest fam and snatched pursez together to-eat before po-lice arrested both of us my nigga got 11 yearz so how'd the fuck-I-get-out??????

this was a lil' off the dome piece... holla with feedback

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Old 06-29-03, 12:02 AM   #2
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I've never been a fan of net-gangsta pieces without much behind them.
You had some good multis, and your flow was alright.
Plus, I liked your wordplay "actions speak louder then words, so I'm an action speaker"....or something like that.
That was the dopest part of this piece.
Try to elevat you vocab and break up your lines so that you can clearly see flow and shit like that.
Pretty good though, for a mainstream type of piece
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Old 06-29-03, 12:05 AM   #3
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thanks son...I ain't really into net-gangsta pieces either but this was a true story
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Old 06-29-03, 12:14 AM   #4
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very nice i like this, keep goin the way ya are
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Old 06-29-03, 12:16 AM   #5
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thanks dog... good lookin'
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Old 06-29-03, 01:03 AM   #6
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Quit Frontin' ...
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Old 06-29-03, 01:13 AM   #7
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^^^ you a funny nigga...
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