Shiznit's THoughts:
Alright...im struggling here...HELP!
U gotta be kidding with this freestyle...its obvious that u didnt put too much effort on it and just write some random stuff that you think it would fit ...and some words didnt even make sense and the line breaks...whats up with that???...i mean do u think you would just like put a couple of words on ur head and add those slashes at the end would make this a piece??...well you gotta have to try more harder than that..
The fact that we all started like this ya kno....its pretty much inderstandable...no hate at all...and thats a good thing...you post something up so u would like see whats wrong with it and you can like accept some advices that would help you elevate....
put a little more effort on ur work kid...think about u would feel that all those time that u put on this would be all worth it id they liked it...its a great feeling
well..vocabs , flow, wordplay, content, rhyme schems, ahhhhhhhhhhh..i think everything should be up...
dont worry ...just ask for help...or maybe just ask MethaNE^^^ over there that thought u were dope...
right meth?
He's the dopest rapper here in RB....*coughdopecough*
well yeah...elevate then recreate...its fun..try it! LOL