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View Poll Results: how did you find this freestyle???
DOPE!!!!!!! 0 0%
this could be sumthin'... 0 0%
no!!!!!!! 0 0%
crap....... 3 100.00%
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Old 07-04-03, 06:54 AM   #1
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Imma flow the bub//
show you what//
thats a wrap, cut//
Imma get warm, fuck//
my lyrics ain't shit dawg//
damn, it looks like I'm drunk//
I smell like a skunk//
No, TDC I don't care bout rock or punk//
after I'm finished you'll lay on the floor//
fell under the weight off the massive flow//
yo leave, go cat go//
you suck dick and you know//
If I was you I would have killed myself...wit a fo'tyfo'//
I know how to keep the flow 'rollin'//
I know how to keep lyrics goin'//
I keep the bitches lowin'//
I keep the heat growin'//
bitchez still suckin' dick//
you still talkin' to a brick//
cuz I don't listen to your shit//

thiz waz my freestyle aiaiaiaight uppin'...
vote and xplain...
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Old 07-04-03, 08:32 AM   #2
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Wow.....




Speechless...
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Old 07-04-03, 12:42 PM   #3
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^ I'll say this for you then..

This was terrible.

Played ass concept. Gay ass lines in here too.

Enhance your vocabulary, work on your bar structure and flow..
Metaz and multiz wouldn't hurt your verse, either.

Sorry man, but this was terrible.

Maybe next year.
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Old 07-04-03, 01:43 PM   #4
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I think the main adjustment you need to make is to make your bars a little bit longer. 5 Words is not a bar....
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Old 07-04-03, 02:47 PM   #5
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Yoor Dope...
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Old 07-04-03, 03:15 PM   #6
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You suck go to to the wackness emergency center and look at the tutorials. No offense but you need them
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Old 07-04-03, 03:20 PM   #7
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Alright...im struggling here...HELP!

U gotta be kidding with this freestyle...its obvious that u didnt put too much effort on it and just write some random stuff that you think it would fit ...and some words didnt even make sense and the line breaks...whats up with that???...i mean do u think you would just like put a couple of words on ur head and add those slashes at the end would make this a piece??...well you gotta have to try more harder than that..

The fact that we all started like this ya kno....its pretty much inderstandable...no hate at all...and thats a good thing...you post something up so u would like see whats wrong with it and you can like accept some advices that would help you elevate....

put a little more effort on ur work kid...think about u would feel that all those time that u put on this would be all worth it id they liked it...its a great feeling

well..vocabs , flow, wordplay, content, rhyme schems, ahhhhhhhhhhh..i think everything should be up...

dont worry ...just ask for help...or maybe just ask MethaNE^^^ over there that thought u were dope... right meth?

He's the dopest rapper here in RB....*coughdopecough*

well yeah...elevate then recreate...its fun..try it! LOL
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Old 07-04-03, 04:38 PM   #8
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thanx for t advise dude, you're cool!
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Old 07-04-03, 08:07 PM   #9
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Originally posted by shiznit
dont worry ...just ask for help...or maybe just ask MethaNE^^^ over there that thought u were dope... right meth?

He's the dopest rapper here in RB....*coughdopecough*



Excuse Me Mrs''i'mMod''

I Love it When Yoo Talk Dirty...

Btw MAW... Keep Postin' More FreeStyles... They're Ill
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Old 07-05-03, 06:18 AM   #10
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Heh.

Seriously, this seemed like a piss-take to me. Nothing less, nothing more. Just a pointless (well actually, if you look at it another way, it has a seroius point to it...) piss take...
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Old 07-05-03, 06:20 AM   #11
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Yoor Dope...


You sound like you're from England back in the 1500s or something...(!)..
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Old 07-05-03, 06:42 AM   #12
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We Would Highly Appreciate You To Visit The Wackness Emergency Center...All That Should've Been Said...Thank You,Have A Nice Day
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