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Old 07-05-03, 06:07 AM   #10
varentao
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Emotions were there...portrayed in a fairly simple, short sharp way...

...what i'd say is try to expand. And fill each line (especially in between each line) up more. It seemed loose at times. Though the emotions were there...

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