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06-30-03, 01:22 AM
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grown up hard, (gang related)
IP: B681 7583
born as a baby
grown up hard slayin me for my trouble lifes like football dont fumble if i slip or stumble my whole life will... crumble.. to a hell id wish id never fell in the first place now my lifes gone to waste, do somethin wrong.. get chased, get beat takin me right of my feet so i could fit in now everything i do is a sin life i lost never to win like a sharp pain of a pin goin right into ur heart gettin higher on the chart so you can get more respect if you low u get beat and neglect kill you with direct affect you cant stand it they wont more outta you, the demand it, its against the law so harsh they band it but i have to do it and if i dont........my life, i just blew it |
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06-30-03, 11:32 AM
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IP: C315 BE4E
dat wuz fly cuzz..no doubt
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06-30-03, 12:19 PM
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
A bit of a strange structure............but was ai
you got your feelings across.....thats a must in poetry Keep droppin tho you got a lil poet in you wantin to come out i think.....ai -pz |
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06-30-03, 12:32 PM
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EVERYBODY HATES ME
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IP: 071B C042
best in the west dead in death i dont really make sence
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06-30-03, 01:53 PM
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IP: B681 7583
thanx to the people who said things that made
sence..... Drop some more in here please, aight thanx pz |
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06-30-03, 10:48 PM
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IP: B681 7583
hit dis up for me please, holla.
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07-03-03, 02:11 AM
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IP: 3801 E5AF
hit dis up for me please, holla.
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07-04-03, 01:07 AM
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BANNED For Being A Freeposter
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IP: CC46 B402
That was nice nigga
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07-05-03, 02:05 AM
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IP: 3801 E5AF
people hit this 4 me please, holla..........
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07-05-03, 06:07 AM
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IP: 4F2B 4EA2
Emotions were there...portrayed in a fairly simple, short sharp way...
...what i'd say is try to expand. And fill each line (especially in between each line) up more. It seemed loose at times. Though the emotions were there... ..resp... |
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07-06-03, 02:19 PM
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IP: B681 7583
hit this people, gimme feed back, ok.
holla |
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07-09-03, 07:12 PM
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IP: 3801 E5AF
come on people, what ya think?
holla back |
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07-16-03, 07:57 PM
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IP: E57F 3F4B
hit dis up for me please, holla.
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07-16-03, 11:10 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: E49E 0B07
it was pretty dope..on the real
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