Aiight man you had a decent flow going but just as previously said you lacked the metaphors multis or any real decent word play for that matter to make this an eye catcher or a brow raiser. I understand that prolly wasn't the intent you had in mind when you spit this, but it also lacked any sense of conviction. Sorry but maybe this would fly if you were ghost writin for one of the back street boys, or some R and B cats but to me this isn't good enough. Keep it up though kid, I'm sure you've got some other stuff that would make me think other wise of you, i'm gonna go look for it now.

Real hip hop is not a genre of music it's not a label that can be bought and placed where ever one chooses it's a way of life, you're either born into it, adopted by it, or eternally connected to it, and you can never get rid of it, and those who aren't excepted by it can never get into it.

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