ummmm flow and writing is pretty on point...the delivery does not jump out at me.....ur cornieness ruins the shit....the only thing that could help u is to get less corny.....i mean that in a positive way....go roll with the niggas from the block, set up a lawn chair on yah corner and watch and take some notes....(DjX has pointed out to me i was being an ignorant ASS HOLE AND I SHOULD BE STONED....this was edited cause i was ignorant....some one please tar and feather me.....he was rite...i was acting in an immature hypocrytical fashion...)...get a new hobby....ur to corny...have a nice day and peep my shit...