Definately good for a first love poem. It's good no matter how many you wrote..

All the lines came together really nicely. It read easy, like a story or something. I didn't have to read twice to get what you were saying cause you made it all pretty clear. You put a lot of emotion into it. Like when you said even though you're right next to him, you feel like you're across the sea. I thought that line was pretty descriptive. The whole thing was good and I enjoyed reading it.

"Wanting to hold you close through every season
And when I fell in love, I wanted you to be the reason
We peomised each other we would be faithful
And never would we become suspects of each others betrayal"

"We are spending more time alone, than we are together
It almost seems like we havent hugged or kissed in forever
Even when im lying next to you, I feel like im across the sea
Our love is no longer there, and thats become clear to me"

Those are the lines out of it that I liked the most. I'm suprised you haven't got any replies for this one. It's definately good..