^ Ehhh at those responses. .

Not a bad piece Demik, to me it didnt feel like it had any perticular topic you wrote it too, you seemed to just drift and merge several different concepts into one giant piece! Imagery was dope at parts, great tongue-twister type rhyme scheme to hold up the flow with all the internals and multi's, very reminiscent of aesop in my opinion, that backpacker influence shines throughout this piece.
Your bar length and such kept skipping and switching up which threw the flow slightly as i read Example:the first ten lines are long, then w/ the eleventh, you shortened them up. Id tell you to work on that, but ive seen your other pieces and you already know that, overall not a bad piece, but ive seen better from you and you know this.

Not bad though, made for an ok read. Reply to mine if you get time. .