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Originally posted by understatement
not bad slik, you have a nice style, though it seemed a bit corny at times.
Most songs don't have as chorus on this site, so that was cool to see.
Your flow was pretty nice, just some advice, ditch the hyphens linkin up your multies, because they're not needed and make your piece look newbish.
The emotion in this was off the hook, but you really didn't have much wordplay, and I couldn't see any metaphors.
Emotion feels that much more profound when you channel it through dope wordplay.
You definatly have some skill, you just need to tighten it up
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^^ Thanks.....Yeah, i didnt use much wordplay, prolly not any. Yeah some of my lines were corny, But this shit wasj ust off the top of my head, just a freestyle basically, just wit a chorus. lol. Yeah the only reason i use the - is becuz i want people to know how im saying it....like i duno if i can explain, becuz its hard, when i use those it means like i take a breath inbetween...kinda? idunno hard to explain...but i hope you understand where im coming from. But thanks......Much Respect..
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