You Know, I Still Remember The Day You Went Away
Felt Like I Was Being Played, You Said U'd Always Stay
Every Night I Prayed, But The Memories Contained-Pain
So I Couldnt Even Look At Yo Pictures On My-Empty-Wall
I Wanted To Call, But Yo Words Left Me Weak, So-I'd-Fall
That Same Night, Before You Left, I Had Yo Ring In My Hand
It Dropped Out Like Sand, You Broke My Whole Lifes Plan
My Heart Was Broken And Empty, Could'nt-Even-Stand.....

Chorus
You Were The Angel In My Sky
You Were My Life, I Would Not Die
Cuz Without You, I Could Not Do
Youre Gone, And Im Still Missin You.....

I Woke Up, You Were Gone, Thought It Was A Dream
But I Saw Broken Bottles, And Remains Of My Screen
Something I Couldnt Believe, You Were My Everything
How Could You Leave? You Saw Me-Beg-And-Pleed
Yo Everything I Need, Crazy I Know Its How It Seems
But Its True, All Of Our Words Spoken, My Heart Broken
Cuz This Was A Game, But You Were The Winning Token

Chorus X2

To All The Couples Out There Who Have There Love
Dont Bluff, Cuz Yo Boo Was Sent To You From Above
I Lost Mine, And Now It Seems Like Life Is To Much
Its What Keeps The World Spinning, Love Is Enough

Dont Give Up On Anyone You Trust
Cuz I Had Love, But Treated It As Lust.............


Chorus.....Until Fade

it was alright but i hate love songs in rap, but you are still really good. Reppin B.R.E way to Be it was OK

lol thanks i think

uppin

that wasa nice drop...i liked the emotion an trueness in it had a good chorus too an meaning nice song lates

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I usually dont like love songs but y'know ever since me and my gf got 2getha i started likin them so i say this was about... 8.5/10. Nice drop and everything.

thanks

yes...this piece had a lot of emotion contained within it...I usually don't really like love songz either but lately I have a little more for some reason...I think girlz are turning me soft...lol...anywayz...yeah this piece was hot...and the flow was nice too...

nice dropp girl i love love raps lol nice jop

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How Could You Leave? You Saw Me-Beg-And-Pleed
Yo Everything I Need, Crazy I Know Its How It Seems
But Its True, All Of Our Words Spoken, My Heart Broken
Cuz This Was A Game, But You Were The Winning Token

Very nice heartfelt piece had good flow, nice use of words.

8/10

not bad slik, you have a nice style, though it seemed a bit corny at times.
Most songs don't have as chorus on this site, so that was cool to see.
Your flow was pretty nice, just some advice, ditch the hyphens linkin up your multies, because they're not needed and make your piece look newbish.
The emotion in this was off the hook, but you really didn't have much wordplay, and I couldn't see any metaphors.
Emotion feels that much more profound when you channel it through dope wordplay.
You definatly have some skill, you just need to tighten it up
Peace

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^^ Thanks.....Yeah, i didnt use much wordplay, prolly not any. Yeah some of my lines were corny, But this shit wasj ust off the top of my head, just a freestyle basically, just wit a chorus. lol. Yeah the only reason i use the - is becuz i want people to know how im saying it....like i duno if i can explain, becuz its hard, when i use those it means like i take a breath inbetween...kinda? idunno hard to explain...but i hope you understand where im coming from. But thanks......Much Respect..

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