yeah this wasnt the greatest but you can always take feedback and make it better

it does become a bit much 12 lines in a row that all share the same beginning. i thought that dividing them up into groups of 4 then sticking a different paragraph in between them, one that doesnt start the same would help it out some. give it more lenght tell more of the story, be able to stick some vocab and imangery in there but hey its just a thought

~ Tera~
DONT HATE

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