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Originally posted by BROOKLYN
My Life Is Like A Field Trip Question . . . It's Fun To, When?!(Win)
You Couldn't Kick A Bar If You Had A Reflex Test In A Jungle Gym
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1st line was filler, 2nd was a nice punch
Get Focused, Like Bill And Ted's Journey Your Career On The Net's Bogus
All The Vets Know This, Which Is Why You Gotta Battle Me Just To Get Noticed
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good personal & punch
You Ain't Real, It's Like You Plagiarize The Way You Have Fake Text
So I Put This Guy In A Headpiece Like Girls Who Have Safe Sex
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2nd line was sorta played but ok wordplay
I'm Not Dissin Your Talkative Wackness But Your Missin The Thought In Rap
Thats Fine For Litter Cus Mental’s Used To Havin Tickets For Dropping Trash
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exelent wordplay
Tendons Torn Off His Back, Crewless Fag, See The Whore's Born A Loner
He's Stuck In Morgues, Ya Time's Cuts Short Like Pre-Mature Organ Donors
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best line in whole verse
How You Expect To Battle The #1 Out Of 9? Your Whole Rep Is To Straddle Guys
Plus You Got More Stretched Wordplay Than A Fifty Point Scrabble Line
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good personal
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overall verse average: 8/10
Quote:
Originally posted by Mentally Kursed
Brooklyn: Please go easy on me, all my wins come from newbies, im not ready to face a vet.
Mentally Kursed: Its okay, i heard all dogs go to heaven
Brooklyn: So after you lyrically murder me ill be in heaven wit my puppy NaNa
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ok diss but unnecessary=2% filler
aight check it
Brooklyn your a newbie, you applied to become a vet but was declined//
you placed your scrotums on a modem so your balls would be on line// (online)
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sorta personal but on-line was played
your verse was bad like a R. Kelley song, called little girl go away//
lyrically stabbin your soul and endin your life, causin your heart to stop then delay//
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filler, didn't make sense but ok flow
slit your throat wit a machette, breath in, then out, and relax//
you cant see yourself beatin me even if you rocked viagra made wit contacts//
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ok flow, again it didnt make sense
my punches hit to the back knockin your vertebrae disks outta your spine//
head shoulders knees and toes chopped up, your body parts no longer connect or align//
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1st line ok, 2nd was childish
your life is like a swish in bball, your career is nothin but net//
you work wit SARS for minor wage and your still not a major threat//
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nothin but net is played, 2nd was up to par
Brooklyn edits his verses to win, battles newbies for his rec//
Changed your font size to a smaller font so your flow doesnt seem stretched//
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false personal, you cant edit in frontlines, 2nd line was ok but doesn't seem to add up
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overall verse average 6.5/10
Overall:BROOKLYN |