yes...very...very basic...peep son...neva start ya poem wit ya title if it really could be somethin great....and "Die Nameless" caught my eyes just by that very title...n u fucked it up even more by startin that as ya openin...*tisk, tisk, tisk*....man...ya flow was aiight...but you tried a liiiil too hard wit that "im white so what, i still spit slang right" typa flow...

ha!,..n i thought you were referin to that lil girl in ya siggy when you spat that one line


but then came along a new girl
try love again, sure i'll give it a whirl


hahahhhhhaha...ROTF!!..i couldnt resist..


but yea...you just need to elevate some...work on ya structure n how you gonna approach it...n convey it to the reader....n work on ya flow..dont "try so hard" just do it...know you do it....


aiight


igido

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