this was good, complex thinkin, i think you would like my spit, peep it out its "let loose"

but back to yours,

i felt it was more poetry then rhymin,

eg:

The thing we all call life is really what people do with their time
As we grow older we recline until the point where living declined

this was good, the syallables were similair in number so it should flow, but the recline word slows it down and so it did nt work so much here, but the content made it good,

good showing of knowledge here, especially the prisim line thats a killer:

Have to plough through all this hating and complicating critiscism
Are own cells are prisons but we can all shine cuz we're prisms
Purposes are incriptin till soon our bodys are just mechanism
Maybe we are? we could just be machines... thats minimalism


yo i liked this expression, rap should hav these knowledgable statements and opinions,

GOOD DROPPIN, keep it up, i wanna see some more,

PEEP MY SPIT AIGHT you should appreciate it....

PEACE