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Rhyming/Flow
YOur flow here was dope, You used multiple Rhymic internals here, they really were really useful not only in helping the flow but also they related to the piece:
"Our mission to bind precision into decisions so we are in control" - that was a good example there, of your ability to change from one rhymin' word to another in the space of a line!
......9/10
Vocab/Wordplay
You had a unique, exquisite vocab here, which you perfected in this piece. More specifically in the 2nd stanza. Lines like the following were totallyu og the hook, extravagent vocab and wordplay were your two dope qualitys in this piece:
"Are own cells are prisons but we can all shine cuz we're prisms
Purposes are incriptin till soon our bodys are just mechanism
Maybe we are? we could just be machines... thats minimalism" ...9/10
Concept/Topic
The topic of Life could be described as an oversued and overrated topic, but when you are able to convert it into your own unique style like you have then it becomes a completely original concept. 8/10
Overall
9/10, only bad thing i could comment on would be the length, it could have defiently been longer! but it was dope as fuck, like pieces like this dawg...tight.
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