hmmm sometimes emotional pieces lose their potency because our feelings block our talent..........don't fret.............this was a good piece i think the message just needs to be fine tuned just a bit.............it really wouldn't hurt to revamp this maybe add a little more thought to it.............but leaving it the way it is wouldn't be bad either poetry just like hip hop isn't about how or sometimes even what you say but how it makes you feel to say it...........1