simple heartfelt truely tender emotion displayed here..............don't fret about this being your first piece and all.........i've been there everyone has...........you have to start somewhere................as you grow as a poet/emcee ways to express yourself elevate............this was fine for what it was meant to be.............a way to express your feelings for the loss of someone you cared for.............try not to worry about reactions of others when releasing something emotional.......typically they won't get it.............really it is more a vehicle for your pain....good drop...........1