Hmmm.....well this was basic,you got some room to elavate.Let me help you out here a bit.

Your flow was there it was on-point.But we don't need the '@the end of every line.We can read,and if your gonna post your writtens or whatever it isn't a 'freestyle' it's called a 'keystyle'.Now you diden't really have a topic going on here which caused it to not make that much of sense.It seemed like you were just writting stuff off the top of your head.Always rember to establish a topic in ur head before you write it.Then you can figure out how to word it later.

Heres some things to improve on;
-multis
-metties
-vocab
-wordplay
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