Dude...

Your format sucks so bad, I almost didn't read this verse when I saw it...

But, since you read mine, I went ahead and read yours...

And was very glad I did.

This is an amazing piece of work.

One of the best I've ever read here at RB.

Flowed like and Eminem rap, and reminded me alot of one.
(The talent, the aggresion ya brought ya message with, the almost flawless flow)

I can see why you made it in a block paragraph, to help the flow, but seriously, it kinda hurts to force it to run together.

But, dude, deep fuckin message.

I could totally relate when I was that age.

This is a very good piece and I'd like ta nominate it into Legends, but I don't think they'd look twice at your format...

Change it and you'd have a something brilliant on every level.

There ya go...

Very good work, my man.

Peace

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