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Very simple my man...no thought provocing lines... your command of words is limited... i have seen some nice open mics from you i expected better...

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umm...nice approach, i didnt know you packed heat like that... the 1st few lines flowed very well, the imagry was used well here too... id suggest you work on the structure a little more... it didnt hurt the flow that bad but it didnt help either

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