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she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

Destroyin Beauty



Stood Erected As The Esance Of Her Presece Was Presented,
Adoring The beauty That Grabbed My Attention, Lust Was Submitted,
I'll Never Forget It, The Glisten In Her Eyes Was Like A Promise Of Mine,
Like She Was Tryna Adress me Without Words, Just Her Face She Expressed Her Mind,
Seeming To Be A Good Girl, ,What I Was In need To Fulfill My World,
All The Spaces Bount To Be Replaced With My Dream About To Unfurl,
A Connection Was Made, We Embrased Thru Our Thoughts Within,
Mind On Intentions To Sin, The Apartment Is Where The Games Begin,
Undressed In A Sexual Fashion, She Caressed My Body Wit Passion,
Experience Is What She Contained, That Was To Be Corrected,
She Had None, She Popped..."Hell Ya She A Screamin Virgin"
Everytime She Moved Around...I Could Hear This Pussy Purin,
The Next Night She Called, Beggin Me To Come To Bed,
I Passed The Inventation, I Dealt Wit The Shame N' Regret,
Weeks Progressed As I Drove By Some Trick In a Mini Skirt,
Talkin To Numerous Men, You Could Tell What She Did For Work,
Then I Saw Her Face, It Was her, How Familiar To Me,
Ragged, Hookin It Out, It Occured To Me...I Destroyed Beauty



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edited...cuz i forgot to put my topic title on there

hanging on

im hangin on so dont knock me down/
im remainin tough, i aint playing around/
im showin all that i got left to remain bound/
you cant let go of me, im too strong to fall cause i refuse to hit the ground/
i aint crazy, just hangin cause no one can replace me/
maybe will get the dignity to not release me until im finished/
dminished, into the air but still be there so im never gone/
ill be here from set to dawn everyday/
ill be hangin here until the day i dont show up at dawn to stay/
i better pray cause this your last dance/
your last chance to make me extinct, i cant speak/
come on i dare you to knock me down/
cause im goin up and you the one that is fallin tremendously/
im still hangin on not spiritually but physically/
im the one hangin on,your the one that is gone/

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I am gonna be what i wanna be, but not just what i wanna be but what i am.

- 2hot2handle(myself)

Uppin for votes.

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^please!!!!!!!!
n if it happens that no1 votes on this...
who wins? will you mad man or some1 understatement...
have the say on who wins?


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87384

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87365

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87393

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87369

I Think That Hi My Name Is...Took This One...
His Topic Was A Harder One, And His Vocab And Wordplay Was More Complex Than 2Hot2Handle's...

Nice Job To Both Of You...Topical Is Difficult...

VOTE=Hi My Name Is...

This was battle belonged to Hi My Name Is...

Pretty good read from him.
Not quite sure how you turned a virgin into a street whore.
Shame on you for not earning dollars off of it!
What kinda pimp are ya? LOL!

Seriously, though.
Better format, deeper meaning and emotion.
Kinda got bogged down at the beginning, but the ending made up for it.

6/10

Too Hot...

Eh.

First off, very generic rhyme.
Second, almost terrible rhyme scheme.
You came good in the first 3-4 lines, incorporated multi's...
Then you seemed to abandon a resonable rhyme scheme...
Also, to be honest...
Your complexity is lacking, build up your vocab some.
Definately build up your emotion.
There was no heart to this verse.

3/10

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2 hot...
Very simple my man...no thought provocing lines... your command of words is limited... i have seen some nice open mics from you i expected better...

Hi My..
umm...nice approach, i didnt know you packed heat like that... the 1st few lines flowed very well, the imagry was used well here too... id suggest you work on the structure a little more... it didnt hurt the flow that bad but it didnt help either

vote Hi My Name IS...