1Liner took this, punches were just not there apoc...

best punch:
"i know your new but you got some issuse/ but goin against me will leave ya "snot" box -- rocked with holes through ya "tissue"
if you never rapped again/ i know no-one would miss-you"

here's some tips (apoc asked for some):

start with better structure, make your lines somewhat close to the same length and the flow should be almost dead on (watch the syllables though , sound them out) - 1liner, take heed to this too, your styles good but structure is choppy

go for punches that are puns - a play on words, not just somethin mean or derogatory, but somethin that makes you laugh at the same time as puttin the other cat down

but #1 thing to avoid being a herb.... don't use basic words to rhyme at the end of sentences (too, you, who,) UNLESS you use them so witty that they are worth it OR you use them in combo rhymes like "you too" and "Blue hue" ect... and if you vote, EXPLAIN THE VOTE peeps hate when you just put "so & so took this easy"

peace

vote honest here:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90294