aight nice piece frmo ma boy nok'd...nok'd had to pick up the soap wen he was in prison in strangeways...nah but all jokin aside the hook was nice..there was a nice flow and the story was a good visual..jus try to extend ya vocab to make it that more complex
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pz

oh ya funn you 4got to poll on ma battle with Aragorn..the link is in ma sig pz