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Old 11-21-03, 12:18 PM   #16
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"-Ever We Live, Forever We Die..
Yet Sumtimes Forever Is Endevoured In Lies..
Togetherness Hides If Severed Inside..
So Whenever The Sides Fail To Provide.."

"-Ever Time Stands When The Clock Goes..
We Drop Roles For Those Things That Got Old.."

yo I was definitely feeling the way you started things off in each verse... what am I saying, the whole thing was pretty good.... but I think your strongest points were in the begining of each verse... the flow was also better in around the beginning of the verses... lol... this some pretty poetic shit... has depth to it...

keep dropping man... -1-
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