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Old 11-18-03, 09:35 PM   #1
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Forever (Off Album)

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(Chorus Ends Like "We'll Be Together For-)

{Verse 1}

-Ever We Live, Forever We Die..
Yet Sumtimes Forever Is Endevoured In Lies..
Togetherness Hides If Severed Inside..
So Whenever The Sides Fail To Provide..
Whether You Rise, Remember Why That You Tried..
Define What You Hide, Cuz Thoughts Un-Defined..
Mortify Ya Lives From Whats Imortally Yours-
-And Whats Mortally Mine..
Theirs No Medal For Love, Nor Trophy For Marriage..
No Level To Run, Nor Hope To Be Prepared Wit..
Relationships Have Flaws, You Tie The Knots In It..
But If The Relationship Is 2-Faced, It’s the Total Opposite..
Grow Into Each Other, Know What Temptation Is..
Then Find Yourself Questionin-
-Who Wears The Pants In The Relationship..
Its Hard, Remember Forever When You Pullin Tha Cards..
N’ When You Think You’ve Callased The Scars..
You Wake Up n’ Not Know Where The Fuck You Are..
So If Forever’s The Beginning-
- Then Where Does The Beginning Of Forever Start?..

CHORUS

{Verse 2}

-Ever Time Stands When The Clock Goes..
We Drop Roles For Those Things That Got Old..
Only God Knows n’ Noticed Plots, Lover A Dancer..
Golden Locks.. Spirit The Color Of Amber..
Love Is Like That.. Just What I Said It Is..
Back Rooms n’ Bathrooms Like Up Skirt Fetishes..
Candle Light, Romantic Music, Food Gourmet..
More Aimed For Actions More Than Foreplay..
At Your Mind State, State Your Mind Personally..
N’ If Diversity Is A Challenge, Challenge Diversity..
Love Is One Fourth Of A Complete Life..
Meet Sights, n’ Greet Likes if Love Is Reached Right..
It Aint All About Fucka Bitch, Get Over It..
Its Like Im In The Maturaity ppl In Their Mid 40’s Get..
Look But Don’t Touch, The Hook Is Too Much..
Lookin At How Many Bitches You Could Fuck..
Life Aint Perfect n’ I’m Not One To Say It Is..
Things Change.. But That’s Just The Way It Is..
In A Year Passed, Remember Times You Coulda Had..
But Memories You Have.. Remember What Was Good-
-And Cancel Out The Bad..
So In Fact, Your Mind Is Exiled From your Brain..
The Same, In Ways Aimed Lovely Minds Insane..
I Dream Of Your Eyes, Scenes Of My Wife..
When It Comes Down To it-
-You Define My Meaning Of Life..


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Old 11-18-03, 10:01 PM   #2
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Weren't you banned for biting?

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Old 11-19-03, 01:58 PM   #3
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No Not Biting.. Same This As MM Same Ip Different
Ppl.. But Everyone Thought It Was Me.. But We Sorted
It Out With Kalvin.. And Everything Was Taken Care Of
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Old 11-19-03, 02:45 PM   #4
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yo this was a nice poetic piece and u came correct for da ladies...real tight on speaking about love espiecially this line

"Relationships Have Flaws, You Tie The Knots In It.."

nice line i think im gonna use dat when i propose to my lady some day....

another ill line dat seem complex yet simple was

"N’ If Diversity Is A Challenge, Challenge Diversity"

but overall this was a real poetic piece nice work don...

da illest line in this piece in my opinion:

"Love Is One Fourth Of A Complete Life..
Meet Sights, n’ Greet Likes if Love Is Reached Right.."
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Old 11-20-03, 02:01 PM   #5
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In Some Way Wit It..
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Old 11-20-03, 02:22 PM   #6
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Old 11-20-03, 03:06 PM   #7
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Old 11-20-03, 04:58 PM   #8
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Old 11-20-03, 05:55 PM   #9
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Old 11-20-03, 06:27 PM   #10
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Old 11-20-03, 06:37 PM   #11
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sounded like it'd be a lot better in audio form, flow was dope from what i caught from it, content was decent, nice multi's and internals in the verse, would need a lot of emotion and delivery to pull this off in audio form though, and possibly a great ammount of breath control 'cause you didnt seem to have any air pockets to catch your breath in the verse, you should of posted the hook too you skank hoe!

holla at me when the audios up and i'll reply ..
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Old 11-20-03, 07:06 PM   #12
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I Dont Got The Instrumentals Locked Yet
Alls I Know Is Tha Last Part.. I'll Deff Do That
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Old 11-20-03, 07:13 PM   #13
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yeah i thought this was a pretty tight peice, nice vocab and multi's n wordplay.....flow was hard but good...and most of all,.. the content was nice...all round good shit.......
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Old 11-20-03, 07:33 PM   #14
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this was a hell of a nice piece....
glad to see ya werent banned...
like cam' sed it def wud get a better flow and edge about it in audio but i dint even try to find a flow here..it found me
thats wot gave it such a good storyline aswell....
coz the flow met the story good i'd consider this piece to catch a

9/10...good work mayne
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Old 11-21-03, 11:53 AM   #15
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Tite flow in this, ..nice work, concept was well good executed ..
good use of some multis and a nice vocab , glad to see ur unbanned = )...Very nice read ..

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