This seemed very very basic. I couldnt picture a beat to rap this too. That was a major flaw. However it did come from the heart and that always helps bring your marks up.
For once I agree with DAARK (fuckin dickhead) by sayin you need to be more creative.
OK but you need to practice....keep writin. 6/10

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