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aright to start off . . that's too short to be a song . . you're a newbie? right? don't worry . . we all wrote like that as newbies . . but what you should really do is extend your lines a little more . . you're lines is too short . . if you're planning to make this into a song . . have at least 3 verses and either a chorus or hook to go after each verse . . but you have to make it go with the title . . metaphors! use them! they'll do great in there . . shows that you have a creative mind . . comparisons! like a metaphor but using words like "as" and "like" . . those do a verse good as well . . what else you can do is try play wit words in your verse . . you know? wordplay . . what else? . . . hmm... . . . you can try to add a little complexity of vocabs but you don't want to do over do it . . it'll just make your drop boring . . i can't really think of anything else to write down except . . just keep writing . . and elevate . . good luck wit the next peice . . i'll see how much you've elevated . . get at me! peep my sig and return the favor mane! it'll be apreciated . . 1
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