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Old 11-18-03, 12:45 AM   #1
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begining of a rap fo my girl and i need feedback!!!

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[ - Chameleon - ]-Edicius
back to work-MC^2
Deva [feat] 2 rich - life experiences

Aight ya'll tryin to make this really good so post your honest opinion and, if critisism, be constructive let me know whats bad, holla back!!!

That girl over there//
wit the short blond hair//
just fallow my stare//
and you'll see her clear//
if down that cheak ran a single tear//
i'd pull a 187 without a fuckin care//
J to the E to the double N, Y//
I'll love that girl to the day i die//
I hope i go first cause i don't like to cry//
but Pac said thugs could with a good reason why//
Her six feet deep, is reason for me//
Why think about it now though we only seven-teen//
us livin' together is still a distant dream//

aight thats not all im gonna have of course but just goin step by step/ HOLLA BACK PLEASE
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