Thread: Respect Me
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Old 11-30-03, 03:28 PM   #8
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Over all that was really nice. I liked the chorus it flowed pretty well. Alothough in some parts you used some words that got it out of flow a little like this---"I'm coming at my allies with a diversionary attack
Welcome to the future...hows does it suit ya?"

You could use this-----I'm coming at my allies with a diversion attack
Welcome YOU BACK to the future...SO hows does it suit ya?

Somethin like that hope i helped
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