ok............ok,ok,ok,les see,da story waz coo,i waz feelin where it waz goin jus felt u coulda said sum shit differently,but 2 each his/her own,seen a few blotches of complex vocab but dey seemed outta place,shoulda focused on makin erythang even,what u did is kinda like takin 2 different sized puzzle pieces n tryna fit em 2getha,shit gets sloppy,but w/ time comes experience,n hopfully w/ experience u'll gain da skill needed 2 fix ur flaws,so keep at it,1~IMAG