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High Class---you had a good verse some good indepth lines and descriptions but i dont think you held onto the topic as well as you could have, good read and writ though well done
Nok' You had an excellent verse, you caught the readers attention right off the start, you made this come alive and picture the scrambling sometimes i fell off like high class for instance i thought in one line you were already out...and then you started tellin about the exscape...but at the end the last 8 line you really grabbed me and kept my focus
Overall Nok' had a more complex verse, and a more enjoyable verse I felt he had some more emotion...that end line was empressive I didnt suspect that, but close battle
Vote Nok
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