Voted For: Tweety

@.-Ok verse.Structure was good.But some lines didn't flow well.Basic rhyme scheme here and in the 2nd bar...full and still doesn't match.And what is the point of the "Pause" and "Doses off" in the middle?It was a little boring.Concept was bland.....Vocab. coulda been better too.

Tweety-Better verse.I thought it described the topic better than the @ gay.Maybe it's the bigger verse or just better wording.Rhyme scheme was better...made shit flow better.But the concept made your verse stand out.God's gun=his dick.And he shoots it out the sky and it comes down as rain.Dope.

Vote-Tweety
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